Boondock Ramblings

A little bit about a lot of things

From the Carrot Ranch Writing Prompt for January 9: “A Carried Wife”. To see the first part of this continuing flash fiction, see Writing Prompt: When the Wealth Didn’t Matter. 

They had to carry her out when they found him lying there on the floor by the hutch covered in blood.

How could he have done it? Why would he have done it? He had all a man could want, all she could give him. Hadn’t the money been enough all these years?

They called it a miracle that she’d walked in when she had; startling him and causing him to drop the gun and shoot himself in the foot instead of the head liked he had intended. She’d collapsed when the gun went off, falling against the hutch.

January 9, 2019, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about a carried wife. Why is she being carried? Who is carrying? Pick a genre if you’d like and craft a memorable character. Go where the prompt leads!

Respond by January 14, 2019. Use the comment section below to share, read, and be social. You may leave a link, pingback, or story in the comments. If you want to be published in the weekly collection, please use the form.  Rules & Guidelines.

13 thoughts on “Flash Fiction: Carrying His Wife Out

  1. parkermccoy says:

    Wow. Haha . Those two aren’t good at anything. They’re made for each other.


  2. Charli Mills says:

    Lisa, you constructed the story in a way that keeps us engaged and feeling all the emotion.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Well, that was supposed to be a more enthusiastic thank you! But the exclamation point got bumped off. 😉


  3. Were you doing the hutch prompt, too, or did that sneak its own way in?


    1. It just snuck it’s way in. I made it a continuation story from last week.

      Liked by 1 person

  4. kat says:

    I’m so used to long, meandering stories that I find it so impressive you managed to put so much story into 99 words. The why is such a haunting question. I’d love to know who these people are and how they got there and what would come next for them. There’s an amazing stroke of good luck, possibly for both of them, but, seriously, ow.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. I never thought I could only do 99 words. I mean you’ve seen my rambling posts and fiction! But it’s been fun challenging myself. I’ve missed your posts. I just noticed you had a new one and plan to go read it after I feed my children – sheesh- always thinking they must be cared for 😂😉

      Liked by 2 people

      1. kat says:

        You did an amazing job! I can see how it would be a good exercise in brevity without losing the message, but I adore your fiction and rambling. Your voice really shines through and it’s like having a conversation with a friend.

        Liked by 1 person

      2. Aw! Thank you, Kat! That’s so nice to hear (read 😉).

        Liked by 1 person

Comments are closed.

%d bloggers like this: